This week we will be working on writing comments on a blog. Here are the rules for this assignment:
- Follow our rules, especially #2 (be nice) and #4 (use language, spelling, and grammar suitable for school).
- Write three sentences about one of these subjects:
- What do you like about computers? What do you not like about computers? What would you like to do on computers.
- What did you do over summer vacation? (please don’t answer this question if you did nothing–that is boring for you to write, boring for Ms. Mercer and your classmates to read).
- What is your favorite thing to do after school? Why?
I like computers because I can go on Myspace.I don’t like computer virus and I like going on Myspace.
Hmm, this is just two sentences. What you are saying is good, but you repeated yourself about MySpace. Can you write a little more?–Ms. Mercer
This summer, me and my family went to Raging Waters and the California State Fair. Did you go to either one of those places over your summer,Ms.mercer?
I did not go to the State Fair, but I did go to Raging Waters in May with the Sixth Graders at my old school. It was lots of fun, but tiring.–Ms. Mercer
This summer I went to Reno to visit my cousin.He have a laptop that can
go on the internet.He always let
Looks like you didn’t finish your sentence. It looks like your cousin lets you use his laptop to go on the Internet. Where do you go on the Internet.
On my vacation I went to boardwalk with my cousin.It was fun at boardwalk.It was far and we got lost then we found it it have a big beach over there I also went
Was this at Santa Cruz? Did you go swimming in the ocean? Was it fun?–Ms. Mercer
On my vacation i me and dad and my mom whent
on my vacation i went to LA. it was such a long drive like sis hour but it was fun.And the places we went to was sisflage it was so cool and thay had so much big rides it look like if it were to fall well it didnt. well we went shoping it was fun .
Please, don’t use your last name when you sent a comment. I sometimes drive down there. I have some family in L.A. Did you go to Six Flags Magic Mountain? I grew up there and used to go when I was your age.–Ms. Mercer
on my summer i went to my friend n we went
fishing at a park n it was really fun
n i went there 4 2 or 3 day.
today i`m going to go with my friend to go use the internet
i`m just going there because i just want to go use on the myspace
only i go there to talk to my friend n sis.
i also send love note to my guyfriend too
n tat y i like to go on myspace a lot
Hmm, I’m seeing lots of chat talk here, and all lower-case. Can you use the [SHIFT] key and capitalized your sentences? Also spell out “and” and “why”, etc. I can see you have been on MySpace and chat a lot. Do you meet people you know in real life, or people you meet online or both?–Ms. Mercer
Hi my name is abilene and for summer i went to raging waters every week.The half pip with my friend aliah t.i liked the big blue one.and thats my summer
That sounds like a fun summer. I went to Raging Waters at the end of the school year. I had fun, but I was hot and tired at the end of the day.–Ms. Mercer
I like computers but only when they have internet because i can go places.I do not like when they get viruses.I like to go on my myspace and other sites.In the summer i went to the park and had lots of fun.That was the best day of my summer.
Do you meet friends on MySpace? Are they friends you have in real life, or just online? What do you like to do at the park?–Ms. Mercer
My favorite thing to do after school is my homework because I like doing math.I also like going on the computer and play games.The last thing I like doing is to play with my dog.
Wow, the dog comes after homework and computer. Are you sure about that? I’m glad you enjoy Math. I’m going to try to get some math games up next week.–Ms. Mercer
my favorite thing to do when I get home from school is sports I like to play soccer and cheerleading.Soccer ended acouple weeks ago.Cheerleading is fun but is realy hard.
It sounds like you are very athletic. That’s good! Running around and doing exercise is good for you.–Ms. Mercer
HI alexus how have you been
Wow, your talking to each other already. Just follow the rules–Ms. Mercer
During my summer vacation I had a lot of fun.Almost all summer I went swimming with my friends next door.(but I was over my dads all summer).When we went swimming my little one year old sister jumped into the 8 and a half feet while my oldest cusin was suppose to be watching her but instead he was letting her walk around the swimming pool.but luckly she was goggy peddleing because we had tought her how to doggy peddle and hold her nose.I know it sounds impossible but she listens real good and is realy smart.While my 2 year lod sister was scared to get into the water and learn like my one year old sister.(by the way this was at Water World or you can call it Sun Slash or Ragus Waters,sorry I dont know how to spell it.)What did you do for your summer vacation?
So you went to Raging Waters and SunSplash. Which did you like better? I haven’t been to SunSplash in a while. Doggy paddling is a good way to start swimming. I love to swim too. Did you have a good time with your dad?–Ms. Mercer
what i did for summer was well i woke up then i ate breakfest i had to start cleaning once i cleaned pretty good i mop,wash,dishes.i did a lot during the summer somtimes i would be on nickelodeon. com playing games or watch my brother what he was doing on myspace. for one week i was at my cosins in Woodland a nother week i was ay my aunts and uncels for another week it was kinda boring.i was also while at my cousin i would be 0n her myspace or on univision. com my summer was pretty good.how was yours?
My summer was great. I learned a lot of new things on computers (like how to stream a radio show on the Internet), and I got to go swimming. I spent time with my son, and just relaxed.–Ms. Mercer
hi my name is Greg my summer vacation was so much fun because
I went to the fair and had lots of fun then the next day I went swimming
and had a bar.be.q
I love b.b.q. I have a propane grill and use it a lot in the summer. I didn’t get to go to the Fair, I hope you have a fun time! This is one run-on sentence. You need to break it up with periods.–Ms. Mercer
MY Name is william my sumer
On the summer me and my family went to a vacation at pardee. I like the place because their’s a big pool. Once a day me and my mom and my brother’s go to swim like 2 or 3 times I can swim 6 feet. the next day we went swimming their was a toad in the water so we swim the other pool.Then we went home.
So you and your family went swimming at Pardee. Was the toad scary? This sounds like fun.–Ms. Mercer
My name is Kassandra and for my summer vacation was nice.I went to Monterrey,Mexico to visit my family. In Mexico I had to help my Nana with her merchandise to sell in the market. While I was in Mexico I went to Mazatlan,Mexico to the beach with my Aunt Laura, my Cousins Rickey and Maurisio,and my Uncle Ricardo.It was fun cause we got to stay at this hotel named ”El Cid”. It had lots of big pools and every night there would be shows,but it was a nice summer vacation.
This is a really great answer. Thank you for being so careful with your spelling! It also sounds very interesting.–Ms. Mercer
On summer I was playing with my brother and play my game boy in jumping on the water.
Ger, you have only written one sentence and I needed three. Please write more. This sounds interesting. I didn’t think a Game Boy could go in the water.–Ms. Mercer
What I like about computers is that I get to go the internet. I don’t have myspace so I don’t go there. If I had my own account, I would go there. I only go on the internet to play games and watch animes. My favs are Bleach and Naruto. What I hate about computers is that sometimes the internet is very slow. When that happens it takes a long time to download the animes I want to watch. Do you hate it when the internet is very slow Ms. Mercer??
I hate it when the Internet is slow. The connection here at the lab is slower than my connection at home. Sometimes this is frustrating.–Ms. Mercer
When you say we can write to other people,I wonder if we can write to other
school?I wonder what kind of people will read this.Can I write to my friend?
Hi Ah!
Well, you did, but you should only write friends after you answer the answers I asked.–Ms. Mercer
This summer I went swimming. It was so fun that I almost drowned. I almost drowned by playing who can hold their breath longer with my cousins. After I went home to relax and slept. Thats what I did over my summer. What did you do over your summer Ms. Mercer.
Wow, the swimming sounds fun, but not almost drowning! I spent a lot of the summer in a pool.–Ms. Mercer
what’s up,Abiline?do you spend all your time writing me?
I went camping with my cousin and we went fishing then we went swimming. Then we went shoot birds after that we went to sleep then we woke up in the morning to fish then we played cards. After that I went home and play game then took a shower and fell asleep.
Wow, I’ve been camping but I’ve never been hunting. Did you have to “dress” the dead birds?–Ms. Mercer
I had a great summer. I went camping,I went swiming too I got to shopping with my antie. I like my teacher this year how have you been. I love internet ,My space.
The spaces you have are interesting. What do you do on MySpace? I’m glad you like your teacher.–Ms. Mercer
Hello my name is kawm v. I love animal. I have a lot of animal at home, I have to clean afher them all the time. My life it not too bad, it little good at home, but at home my family toke alot. But I love my sister and bother. I go to gaia not too must, but if I have time to go on gaia I will be toking to my friends. I like to go to youtube alot, u can lessn to song all the time. But I have to do my homework. I like to draw alot at home. I have to feed all of my pet and clean the poop all the time. But you can get use to it. Then I can go to sleep.
Hi Kawm! You had you last name in this post, please remember to not use your full name on the Internet! I have a family that talks a lot too. That’s interesting that you like Gaia, what do you do there? Do you like your pets? My son wants to get a rat, maybe you can give me some advice?–Ms. Mercer
What I like to do after school is go to start. After start I go home clean the kitchen clean my room.After I clean my room I eat dinner.Then I talk to my friend on my moms cell phone or sometimes my sister’s cell phone.After I talk to my friend on the cell phone I take a shower and go to sleep.
So you like to talk on the phone a lot. Do you have to watch how many minutes you use? Do you text, or just talk?–Ms. Mercer
On my vacation I went bowling with my dad friends We stay there when it was night.They turn off the light and the shoes glow I also play game at bowling It was fun at bowling.I got to play bowling the ball was heavy so I got to play.I got one strike because I went slow.I slip when I throw the ball.Sometimes I miss because I throw the ball fast.My dad throw fast sometime he get strike.My auntie came back to alaska she have a boyfriend and she have a baby.
I have never been glo-bowling, that sounds like fun. Did your Auntie go back to Alaska, or come from there?–Ms. Mercer
in myspace i do chat a lot n i do go in myspace alot too.
in myspace i have people tat i have seen n i have not seen
but i only have a little people
but now i dont know how many people i got because i didn`t
got on there 4 a long time.
i really miss my myspace because i haven`t
use it 4 like 1or2years n tat a long time.
when i get i`m going to get ready to go with my friend to go
touch my myspace n it`s fun to be in there if u dont hate it
n get tired of it.
but i dont even get tired of it n i only miss it alot.
i want to tell u some thing but i`m to shy to tell u
but in myspace i always send love notes to my guy
n i love it when he rite back to me n i was really happy n just not happy
i am really really really happy
I can tell you use it a lot Julie because you are writing in text lingo. You’ve written a lot, and I see that you miss MySpace. Why can’t you use it now? Please use regular standard English, not chat next time you write, so I can give you credit, because you have written a lot.–Ms. Mercer
hi tava how have you been see you at recess.
hi,linda!what are you doing,gal?!Write back,ok.please!iget bored sometimes!and peace!
Onmy summer I stay home with my grandparent and went shoping with them .I also went to the mall with mom and we bot school stuff Iwas really happy about school.L love school because Iwant to be with my friendes and teachers.And I also want to play wall ball with my friends. I love school because every one in this school is really nice . I also like school because all my friends are nice to me .
I’m glad you like school. It’s good to be somewhere you are liked and have fun.–Ms. Mercer
After I came back from Reno I just spend the rest of my summer vacation
with my family.It was a great summer vacation!
What did you do in Reno? This is a little short (only two sentences).–Ms. Mercer
Work together with your team.Help each other.THATS COOPERATION.
This is good, but the last part is in ALL CAPS, that’s shouting. Be careful about that.–Ms. Mercer
Over the summer I went to my cousin’s house and I went swimming. I also stayed home and go on the computer. I had lots of fun over the summer and I can’t wait until it’s summer vacation again. What did you do over the summer Ms. Mercer?
Thanks for finishing this assignment. Read some of the other comments, and you’ll see what I did.–Ms. Mercer
What I like about computers is the internet.
I love to play on Disney channel.
What do you like about computers Ms.Mercer.
Oh many things, I love talking to all of you here.–Ms. Mercer
what I like about computers are typing to my friends who live far away.What I dont like about computers are that they get virus’.What I want to do on computers are learn how to type without looking.
Thanks for finishing this up. Sonya, do not use your last name when you are on the computer.–Ms. Mercer
On summer it was not really fun or boring.The fun thing is when my dad bought us a basketball court.We went toWalmart and bought a basketball .We also bought a soccer ball.It was fun.
That does sound like fun! Thanks for finishing this assignment.–Ms. Mercer
After school i go and do some sports .Me and my brother would play basketball or ride my bike .I would go swimming and play with my dog then i go and pick up my brother then my homework.That is what i do.
Thank you for finishing this up! This is very good. Remember to capitalize “I”.–Ms. Mercer
This summer I went to San Francisco on a ferry boat and past the Golden Gate Bridge.ME,my family,and some relitives went for one hour and thirty minutes.There we saw over fifty seals on a dock and they were falling and coming on the dock.
You went with relatives? This sounds interesting.–Ms. Mercer
After school I go on runescape. then I go outside and play with my friends.Then I do homework.
Thank you for finishing the assignment.–Ms. Mercer
After school the first, thing I do is homework. Second, I clean my room nice and neat. Last, I eat and go play for ever at Jennafer`s house. THE END
Thank you for finishing this assignment. Try not to use spaces as much.–Ms. Mercer
Hi my name is Greg my vacationwas so much fun I went to the sacremento state fair and went to visit my antis house and start playing video games and ate posole and soda.
Thank you for finishing your assignment.–Ms. Mercer
What I like about computer is music and basketball game. On computer I go to Gotuitmusic.com. The game I go to is Disneychannel.com it really fun.
Thank you for finishing your assignment.–Ms. Mercer
what I do after school is go home do my homework play on the computer but not on the internet.On a computer game that I got on my birthday.I also eat and then sometimes I play outside.
Thank you for finishing your assignment.–Ms. Mercer
i wonder if the test is going to hard. I love it..
i love school.I cant wait for the next test.I love J
Cooperation is about working together. It’s to help each other when ever people need help.That’s cooperation.
Cooperation means to do team work. Team work is good because helping each other is very good. Helping is very good cause if you help each other you will be finish faster.
I like how one sentence leads into the next. team work to helping to finishing. This is a three.–Ms. Mercer
HI my name Luis and heres what I did this summer.First, I went to a